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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place #discuss
A learning curve is essential for growth. Few people argue that
parents
 should teach their children how to become a better part of
community
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the community
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.
Whereas
,
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 believe that it is the responsibility of the schools.
According to
 me, both parties should play their part in the development of
young
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 generation towards the betterment of our community. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will explain about
this
 issue. First of all,
learning
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 process of the kids began from their house. They will see and learn from their
parents
.
Such
 as
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 how they behave with others,
they
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 good and bad habits. Home is the first learning place for any kids and their elders are their first teachers
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 their mothers. Because, in the
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 years they spend most of the time with their moms. That's why, they have the main duty to teach their kids
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some
basics
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 skills and
behaviors
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 to be an active and effective member of
society
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the society
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 in which they are living. During early
childhood
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childhood,
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child
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children
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 learn almost everything from their
parents
 and other family members. They should focus
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initial
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 development of their child and teach them good manners
for instance
, how to respect
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others
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 and how to help each other.
On the other hand
,
according to
 some schools of
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, it is the responsibility of their teacher to make young ones good part of the circle. When they
starts
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 going to school the teacher is the most influential individual that can
effect
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 their behavior. Little ones treat their teacher as their
parents
 and agree on all the things
the
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said
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. In these initial
days
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 it is very important to teach them
basics
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the basics
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 of living in a happy population and make it better with their presence. What students learn
in
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starts
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 of their education will stay with them for
the
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 lifetimes so it's very important to provide them with
strong
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 base and provide
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society with
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the finer
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individual
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individuals
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. In conclusion, it is the duty of both
parents
 and
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educator
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educators
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 to focus on the growth of their younger ones and help them to bring a positive change in the public.
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Try to elaborate more on your main points. Providing deeper explanations or more examples can strengthen your argumentation.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or argument to maintain clarity and structure.
task achievement
Your introduction successfully outlines both views and presents your opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion summarily and effectively wraps up the discussion and reiterates your stance.

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