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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad? Try to do this under exam conditions — try to avoid looking at any notes you've made while studying this section. Remember, in the exam you'd have about 40 minutes to complete this task.

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Nowadays, many students want to
study
 abroad or live outside
from
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of
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 their original
country
. It is
such
 a good thing, especially if the
country
 can not support or provide
the
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 needs
for
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of
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 its citizens. Actually, there is nothing wrong if
people
 want to get a better life and search experience in another
country
. But, obviously, there are some benefits and drawbacks of
this
.
This
 essay will begin with the advantages.
First,
people
 can learn and explore many things
in
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apply
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overseas.
For example
, a student who
live
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lives
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 in a
develop
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developed
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country
 will have hardships
to
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in studying
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study
about
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subjects like information technology or robotics because the
country
do
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does
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 not have an expert
on
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in
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this
 field. By going abroad, they have a chance to profound and develop their skills. Another example is the origin
country
do
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 not open employment for
people
 who
study
 nuclear engineering. By that, they decide to work abroad and
living
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live
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 there since the
country
match
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with
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their ability.
However
,
people
 will
facing
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face
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 problems
due to
 they leave their
country
.
Firstly
, they can go out but maybe not their family.
For instance
, their parents
got
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get
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 sick and they can not visit them just because they have to stay for a long time or they must go to work.
Then
,
usually
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 the norms from
initial
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the initial
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country
is
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are
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 totally different
with
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from
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 the
country
 they are aiming for.
To sum up
, even though there are a lot of advantages
by
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to studying
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study
 or
work
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working
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 abroad,
people
 should consider its disadvantages. If they
found
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find
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 there
is
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are
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 no issues, they can try to
looking
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look
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 for their
lucks
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 in other countries. I recommend
for
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people
 who go overseas,
they
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apply
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must still remember where they belong.
Submitted by wishmeluck  on

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that arguments and points are fully explained and logically connected. Sometimes the logic in transitions wasn't very clear, so practice organizing ideas better.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammatical errors and language use. Minor mistakes can sometimes distract the reader and reduce the overall effectiveness of the essay.
task achievement
Try to provide more in-depth analysis or examples for each main point. This would help to substantiate your arguments and improve the clarity of your message.
task achievement
You have made an effort to present both the advantages and disadvantages of living or studying abroad, which shows an attempt at a balanced argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear and appropriate introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument well.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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