Some people feel that children should be able to choose the subjects they are interested in while others feel they should study the basic require subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There will always be two different opinions in
academic
field Add an article
the academic
whether
children should be able to select the Change preposition
on whether
subjects
they are interested in, on the other
hand
it said that children should study the basic Add the comma(s)
hand,
require
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required
subjects
. It is true that learning something you really enjoy sometimes will give a better result compared to when it something
we don’t really take Add a missing verb
is something
interest
in and just doing it because of responsibility. But it not always Correct article usage
an interest
guarantee
.
Sometimes, people become too careless by thinking that it can be done easily just because they like it. Wrong verb form
guaranteed
Thus
, they don’t give their best. Furthermore
, some subjects
can not be selected before taking previous basic or required subjects
. For example
, calculus is required before taking programming
subject. Many people do not enjoy learning calculus or theoretical Correct article usage
a programming
subject
. They usually prefer to take the practice directly without learning the theory first. Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
And the
outcome may be not as good as when we know the Correct word choice
The
basic
before learning the practice. Fix the agreement mistake
basics
However
, having a
privilege to choose the Change the article
the
subjects
that we enjoy will give
benefit Verb problem
apply
itself
. We can explore something we enjoy and can help the learning development.
Personally, I agree that we Correct pronoun usage
us
shall
be able to choose some Verb problem
should
subjects
that we really want to learn but with some limitation
. If Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
we
want to learn Correct pronoun usage
I
subject
that Add an article
a subject
the subject
need
Change the verb form
needs
the
basic knowledge, Correct article usage
apply
then
I will take it even though I do not really enjoy it. Learning something is always about step by step and can not be instant. Finally
, both opinion
are good to Change to a plural noun
opinions
implemented
but it always Change the form of the verb
implement
depend
Change the verb form
depends
with
the situation.Change preposition
on
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coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a clearer and more logical structure. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your points flow smoothly from one to the next. Use linking words and phrases more effectively to show the connections between your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be stronger. Make sure that your introduction clearly presents the topic and your position, and that your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates your opinion.
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While you have supported your main points with some examples, these could be more specific and relevant. Try to include more concrete examples and evidence to back up your arguments.
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Some of your ideas are clear and comprehensive, but others could be more fully developed. Make sure that you explain your points in detail and explore the implications of your arguments.
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You have addressed both sides of the issue, which shows a balanced approach to the task.
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Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and presents logical arguments.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion