Some people think that hosting an international sport event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It’s believed that show their culture
an
international Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
sport
Change the noun form
sports
events
are
hosted by a Unnecessary verb
apply
country
is
good Correct subject-verb agreement
are
however
others said that it is bad for the country
. Both sides have pros and cons for the country
. So when the country
take
a responsibility like that, the government will hold a balance.
Change the verb form
takes
While
hosting major sport
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sports
events
can bring prestige and economy
benefits. the benefits of Replace the word
economic
this
areCorrect article usage
an
economy
boost, Replace the word
economic
infrastructure’s
success and having a chanceChange noun form
infrastructure
Fix the infinitive
to
through
worldwide. Change preposition
apply
For example
, tourists, athletics and media personnel spend money on accommodation, transport and food in this
country
where an
intercontinental sports activities are hosted. Preparing for Correct article usage
apply
this
event led to Correct article usage
the construct
construct
Replace the word
construction
new
facilities like Change preposition
of new
stadium
, transportation Fix the agreement mistake
stadiums
system
Fix the agreement mistake
systems
also
hotels. Moreover
, have an opportunity to introduce their cultural prestige to the world. additonally
they get Correct your spelling
Additionally
experience
the next once.
Add the particle
to experience
However
, take
Wrong verb form
taking
a
permission to organize Remove the article
apply
such
events
brings some negative effects like increase
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increased
price
, overspending money, traffic jams and pollution. After worldwide occasions Fix the agreement mistake
prices
is
taken, the government of Change the verb form
are
this
country
have to create a good condition for all visitors. Furthermore
, a great majority traffic
stuck can appear during Change preposition
of traffic
this
time. As well as
a lot of litter Rephrase
Also
come
into being. Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
For instance
, Uzbekistan faced like problems when it hosted the Asian Football Cup last
year. In addition
, spending much
money from their budget, Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
as a result
it
leads to Correct pronoun usage
apply
borrows
.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
borrowing
an international
Correct the article-noun agreement
international sport actions
an international sport action
sport
actions considered Change the noun form
sports
as
useful to the Change preposition
apply
country
by people but there is
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are
contrast
views among others. EvenWrong verb form
contrasting
a
Correct word choice
if a
country
receive
continental Correct subject-verb agreement
receives
sport
Change the noun form
sports
events
, they
should plan everything Correct pronoun usage
it
with
carefully as well Change preposition
apply
hold
a balance Correct word choice
as hold
the
cost and long-term impact.Change preposition
between the
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task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of hosting an international sports event.
task achievement
You've made some good points about economic benefits, infrastructure improvements, and cultural opportunities associated with hosting such events.
Your opinion
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