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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart given provides information about the number of residents who relocated from suburban areas to cities in three countries, namely
Iran
,Indonesia, and Russia, from the year 2000 to 2020,including approximate forecasts of those for the following 5 years.
Overall
, one outstanding feature of the data is that all of them illustrate
upward
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an upward
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 trend from the start to the end,with Indonesia's representing the lowest and
Iran
's and Russia's
amout
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amounts
 reaching a peak
at
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in
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 2020 with an equal fraction.
However
, the data
also
 forecasts in the following 5-year
peiod
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period
is
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apply
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that
Iran
's population relocating to the city
outnumber
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outnumbers
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the Russian's
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Russian's
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Russian
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 movement. Regarding
the
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Indonesia's public, it
displays
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 a gradual rise until 2020 and plateaued for a forecasting period, standing at 30% of the total. As far as Russian relocation is concerned, it started at the highest compared to the two rest at the beginning and significantly rose throughout the timeframe.
Furthermore
,
the
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Iran
's data
also
 reveals a board similarity with the previous location because there was
an
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moderate growth from the year 2005 onward,excluding the first period showing a gradual increase from approximately 8% to 10% by 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words iran with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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