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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart depicts data about the proportion of urban population in four Asian countries over a 70-year period, starting from 1970 to the projected 2040. At first glance, it is visible that all countries experienced an upward tendency. Notably, in 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the outnumbered
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 among all of the remaining regions. In 1970,
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the Philippines
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 had the highest
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, and Malaysia was the second-highest, their number
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 32% and 30% respectively. With
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the Philippines
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, it
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 up minimally and after 1990, it started to have a modest fluctuation to reach under 50% by 2040, it is expected to
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 back to approximately 52% by 2040. As for Malaysia, people who live in metropolitan in
this
 country saw a dramatic rise, surpassing
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the Philippines
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 at around 48% in 1991, and having a prediction to continue rising to reach over 80% by 2040.
On the other hand
, regarding the lowest
figure
 of the graph, specifically the Indonesia. The urban
recidency
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residency
 rate in Indonesia underwent
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dramatic growth, surpassing Thailand at 28% in 2000 and
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the Philippines
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 at roughly 42% in 2010.
Moreover
, with a prediction, individuals believe that it will reach about 60% by 2040, being the second-highest
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.
Finally
, the rate of people living in Thailand's cities
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 slightly to under 30%
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 but almost
retain
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remain
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 unaltered until 2020, interestingly, it is projected to reach nearly 50% by 2040.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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