The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australia water consumption for last year.
The bar diagram illustrates the total amount of
water
used by six different Australian cities in the last
year and the pie figure presents the proportion of distributed water
to its resources in Australia in 2014.
Overall
, the highest is Perth and the fewest
is Correct word choice
lowest
Canberra
consumption of Change noun form
Canberra's
water
in
Change preposition
apply
last
year. Also
in pie
chart Correct article usage
the pie
highest
per cent used Correct article usage
the highest
water
to
agriculture(67 per cent), the least Change preposition
for
water
use
Replace the word
used
to
mining(2 per cent)
Change preposition
for
To begin
with bar
chart the highest annual residential Correct article usage
the bar
water
consumption in Perth is 300 when
in Canberra it is 140 Correct word choice
while
kilolitre
per property. Fix the agreement mistake
kilolitres
Second
highest consumption of Add an article
The second
water
in
Brisbane 250 Add a missing verb
is in
kilolitre
and Fix the agreement mistake
kilolitres
Adelaide
240 kilolitre.
Change preposition
in Adelaide
On the other hand
, Households take the second place after Agriculture with 9%. Other industries and manufacturing have exactly the same proportion 4%, So that water
supply and Electricity, but with 7%.Submitted by dnm.best on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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