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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the amount of
oversea
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overseas
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 individuals
attended
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 a specific Caribbean between 2010 and 2017. From a closer inspection of the graph, it is obvious that in the beginning
Visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 was the second predominant factor but
Visitors
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 staying on cruise ships surpassed them. In 2010, the total number of
visitors
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 began the period with 1
million
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 and it witnessed the wildest growth to 3.5
million
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 until 2017, maintaining dominance throughout the period. The figure for the number of
Visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 surged to 1.5
million
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 in 2013 and it did not see any changes until 2017,
however
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, it saw a fluctuation in 2015.
While
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, there was a variation between 2010 and 2012, in the number of
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Visitors
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visitors
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 on cruise ships.
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, it underwent a marked surge from nearly 0.3
million
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 to 2
million
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by
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 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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