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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied table indicates the percentage of
students
 who participated in four
various
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 high-school types over a nine-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
number
 of pupils preferred to study lessons at Community
Schools
.
However
,
students
 did not tend to go to the Specialist
Schools
 very much over the period. In 2009,precisely %58 of pupils were into participate
to
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 Community
Schools
 (which was the highest
number
 of
participation
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 over the period),just ahead of the proportion of
stundets
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students
 who liked to study lessons at Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 at %52 in 2000.
Moreover
,attending
to
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Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 for
students
 was a bit as popular as participating
to
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 Community
Schools
 at %38 and %32 in 2005,respectively.
In contrast
,
students
 did not choose to go to Specialist
Schools
 as secondary at %10 in 2009.(Which was the least
number
 of attending over the whole year).
In addition
,the percentage of
students
 who were keen on attending
to
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Grammar
Schools
 was %24 in 2000,which
this
number
 was halved for the proportion of pupils in Grammar
Schools
 at %12 in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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