Excessive consumption of sugar causes many health related issues. Some people believe the government should control population’s sugar intake while others think people themselves should be responsible for their sugar eating habits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Health
issues nowadays mainly the uncontrolled consumption of sugar is
one of the main concerns that the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
government
is facing now..
Many Replace the punctuation
.
...
people
shift the blame it go the government
and
should be responsible Correct word choice
which
to
its Change preposition
for
people
conditions. Change noun form
people's
However
, there are people
argue
as well that it is an own's Correct pronoun usage
who argue
responsibility
to be crucial in eating food that people
must indulge.
Change preposition
in.
Due to
increased
rate of cases of patients who consume sugar in their Correct article usage
the increased
daliy
Correct your spelling
daily
life
, many significant others stated that the Fix the agreement mistake
lives
government
has
not Verb problem
does
enough
solutions and reforms Add a missing verb
have enough
in minimizing
the production and consumption of sugar. The Change preposition
to minimize
government
funded the agencies and departments more when it comes
Wrong verb form
came
in
developing the economy rather than raising and focusing Change preposition
to
to
Change preposition
on
health
issues. A citizen named Barbara James says, "The government
is mainly focusing on developing the economy without paying attention to its people
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people's
health
.". If this
problem continues, many people
in each communities
will have more cases of death and surely will remark the country as a poor country.
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community
On the other hand
, those who are in the previliged
areas, mostly, stated that it is the citizen's Correct your spelling
privileged
responsibility
to educated
themselves and be mindful of what they're enjoying. Based on studies, most of the patients who suffer Wrong verb form
educate
this
condition Change preposition
from this
has
been living with sedentary Correct subject-verb agreement
have
lifestyle
Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
due to
uncontrolled craving
Fix the agreement mistake
cravings
to
sweet pastries and beverages. An example Change preposition
for
for
Change preposition
of
this
are
those employee who works in a very stressful environment and time of shifts. Change the verb form
is
This
will lead them to crave sweets which compensates
Correct subject-verb agreement
compensate
the
hormonal changes in Change preposition
for the
a
human body. Correct article usage
the
Thus
, if people
are educated and have proper control with
their diet, it is most likely for them to acquire Change preposition
over
this
condition.
In conclusion, the government
has many responsibility
including the Change to a plural noun
responsibilities
health
of its people
. They have a huge part in maintaining a good health
environment for everyone. However
, it is somehow, the people
's responsibility
as well to have a balance
diet to have a healthy body.Change the verb form
balanced
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