Excessive consumption of sugar causes many health related issues. Some people believe the government should control population’s sugar intake while others think people themselves should be responsible for their sugar eating habits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Health

issues nowadays mainly the uncontrolled consumption of sugar

is

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one of the main concerns that the

government

is facing now

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Many

people

shift the blame it go the

government

and

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which

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should be responsible

to

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its

people

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conditions.

However

, there are

people

argue

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as well that it is an own's

responsibility

to be crucial in eating food that

people

must indulge

.

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in.

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Due to

increased

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the increased

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rate of cases of patients who consume sugar in their

daliy

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daily

life

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lives

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, many significant others stated that the

government

has

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not

enough

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solutions and reforms

in minimizing

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the production and consumption of sugar. The

government

funded the agencies and departments more when it

comes

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in

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developing the economy rather than raising and focusing

to

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on

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health

issues. A citizen named Barbara James says, "The

government

is mainly focusing on developing the economy without paying attention to its

people

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people's

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health

.". If

this

problem continues, many

people

in each

communities

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community

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will have more cases of death and surely will remark the country as a poor country.

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, those who are in the

previliged

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privileged

areas, mostly, stated that it is the citizen's

responsibility

to

educated

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themselves and be mindful of what they're enjoying. Based on studies, most of the patients who suffer

this

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from this

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condition

has

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been living with sedentary

lifestyle

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lifestyles

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due to

uncontrolled

craving

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cravings

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to

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for

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sweet pastries and beverages. An example

for

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this

are

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those employee who works in a very stressful environment and time of shifts.

This

will lead them to crave sweets which

compensates

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compensate

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the

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for the

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hormonal changes in

a

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the

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human body.

Thus

, if

people

are educated and have proper control

with

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over

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their diet, it is most likely for them to acquire

this

condition. In conclusion, the

government

has many

responsibility

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responsibilities

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including the

health

of its

people

. They have a huge part in maintaining a good

health

environment for everyone.

However

, it is somehow, the

people

's

responsibility

as well to have a

balance

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diet to have a healthy body.