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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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This
 line graph illustrates the proportion of Australian
exportations
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exports
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 to four nations.
Overall
, China which was one of the
last
 countries
receiving
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to receive
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 Australian products has become the first throughout
the
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apply
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time.
However
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However,
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Japan
 saw a significant drop
nervertheless
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nevertheless
, US and India experienced some fluctuations. In 1990
Japan
 and India were the
last
 countries regarding exportation with
approximatively
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 3%,
US
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the US
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 had an average of 10% with
Japan
been
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 the first with slightly more than 25%. In 1995
Japan
 and
US
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the US
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 had a drop of about 5% in exports the two other countries
been
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were
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 constant. US proportions fluctuated between 12 and 5% during the given period. In 2000
US
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the US
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 regained its lost proportion meanwhile
japan
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Japan
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 continued to drop in percentage but still
having
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had
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 the highest percentage of exportation 18%. China had a rapid growth and
Austalia
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Australia
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 exported more there in 2012 up to 28%.
Nervertheless
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Nevertheless
, India has
remain
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remained
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 with the lowest
percent
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percentage
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 with a slight increase in 2010 but an immediate fall in 2012 followed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • notable rise/drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • export destinations
  • trade relations
  • upsurge
  • downturn
  • economic ties
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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