Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The advancement of

technology

has dramatically changed humankind’s life. In

this

era, people can work from

everywhere

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as long as they connect to internet access.

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kind of

advantages

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also

bring

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benefit

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benefits

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for

children

because they do not need to come to class for learning. In fact, they can

also

participate in virtual

class

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classes

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provided by foreign schools or universities. Given the situation, the writer

argue

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that these features of globalization are beneficial for workers but likely adverse for

children

. Regarding the first statement, it is incontrovertible that

technology

has provided many opportunities for job seeker to get their occupation. Remote working is one

of

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the

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example of

technological

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a technological

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advantages

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which

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in which

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individual

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an individual

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from one country can be an employee for an overseas company.

Additionally

, working remotely

also

can be a solution for people who live in

the

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crowded

city

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cities

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such

as Jakarta, so they do not need to deal with

congestion

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street

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every day and

consequently

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they will use the time to boost their productivity. Meanwhile, studying from home is not recommended for

children

, unless there is a force majeure situation

such

as

COVID-19

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the COVID-19

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pandemic which

imposed

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forces

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everyone to conduct social distancing. Many psychological research highlighted the importance of face-to-face

meeting

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meetings

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for

children

due to

mental health

issue

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. Engaging directly with their peers and teachers can be the utmost method to

made

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them

learning

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about emotions and social interactions.

To sum up

,

although

technology

offers many conveniences for human being life, it can be a cause of

problem

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problems

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if we fail to potentially manage the benefits.

However

, regardless of what the author said about the negative

effect

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effects

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of

technology

for

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children

, it does not mean keeping all technological devices away from them.

On the contrary

, schools and

government

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had better adjust the education curriculum

on introducing

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technology

to

children

.