The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart illustrates
consumption
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the consumption
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of fast
food
on
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by
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the United
State
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States
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citizien
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citizen
citizens
. Chart breaks down the
consumption
six
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of six
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data. Units measured by
per centage
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percentage
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.
Overall
, the United
State
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States
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folk eaten
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ratio contributes mostly once a
week
and once or twice a
month
.
Every day
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consumption
and never
consumption
during the period was given similar each other and
contribute
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contributed
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fewest
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the fewest
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percentage
. In 2003, consume of fast
food
sligtly
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slightly
increased every day, several times a
week
and once a
week
respectively.
In addition
, percentages are just under 5%, just over 15% and just over 30% respectively. After that,
consumption
declined from 30%
on
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to
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once or twice a
month
, and it remained to decline a few times a year
and
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apply
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finally
, individuals that never eat fast
food
down
up
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by
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5% percent. In 2006, eating fast
food
once a
week
peaked
approximately
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at approximately
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35% and
then
, decreased to
eat
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eating
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once or twice a
month
25
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at 25
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%
percent
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per cent
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and people who never
eat
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ate
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fast
food
percentage
finished under
the
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apply
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5%. In 2013,
despite of
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after
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two years,
ratio
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the ratio
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of
consumption
once or twice a
month
peaked
approximately
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at approximately
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35%,
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and
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then
there
is
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was
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a remarkable
decreased
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decrease
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on
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in
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people who eat fast
food
a few times a year.
This
percentage
was 15% and individuals who eat fast
food
never under the 5%
percentage
final year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, food, week, month, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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