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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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This
 table illustrates the
number
 of persons from five
western
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Western
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countries
 staying in each other's states in 2011.
Overall
,
Germany
 and
UK
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the UK
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 were overcrowded with foreigners followed by
Spain
.
However
,
Polish
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the Polish
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 had the lowest increase in their population. British population is more present in
Spain
,
Germany
 has more
people
 in the
UK
, Italy and
Spain
 were more present in
Germany
 all these
countries
 had their lowest
number
 in Polish.
Polish
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Poland
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 had the highest
number
 of persons living in
other's
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other
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countries
,
In contrast
,
Spain
 had the lowest
number
 of their population staying out.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
Germany
 and the
UK
 were more crowded with
people
 dealing with more immigrants.
Nevertheless
,
Polish
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the Polish
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 did not
received
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receive
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 many
people
instead
 there
is
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was
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a
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apply
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huge immigration to other
countries
. It is noticeable that immigration is more present in
Germany
 and in
UK
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the UK
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whereas
,
Polish
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the Polish
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foght
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fought
fight
 more with
emmigration
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immigration
emigration
while
 having the lowest
number
 of
people
 coming to
leave
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live
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 there.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, countries, germany, uk, spain, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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