Nowadays many people wear western clothes rather than their traditional clothes. What are the reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development?
In
this
contemporary world, people
try to follow the most trending and latest fashion to look attractive. People
often adopt modern clothing style
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styles
instead
of old and boring attire. This
essay will highlights
the reasons and discuss Change the verb form
highlight
weather
it is Correct your spelling
whether
constructive
or pessimistic development.
To commence, one of the major Correct article usage
a constructive
reason
to follow Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
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the western
western
dressing Capitalize word
Western
pattern
is that, Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
it
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they
looks
advanced and updated Correct subject-verb agreement
look
that
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which
catch
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catches
an
eye of Correct article usage
the
people
. One excellent example of this
is, most
of the Correct word choice
that most
model
and public figures wear Fix the agreement mistake
models
western
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Western
clothe
, Correct subject-verb agreement
clothes
thus
everyone admire
them. Change the verb form
admires
Moreover
, that
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apply
people
always want new creation
rather than sticking Fix the agreement mistake
creations
on
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to
same
old fashion. Correct article usage
the same
Therefore
, every individual follow
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follows
updated
design to be more confident and highlighted.
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an updated
Secondly
, this
development will bring some contradiction. Youth of this
generation doesnot
even know the value of their norms and traditions. Choosing Verb problem
do not
latest
and fashionable dresses is Correct article usage
the latest
consider
as living quality and modern lifestyle. Change the form of the verb
considered
However
, keeping and promoting ones
traditional clothing is equally important. A good illustration of Change to a genitive case
one's
this
is, wearing
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that wearing
own
cultural clothes Correct pronoun usage
your own
in
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on
some
special Correct quantifier usage
apply
occasion
like Fix the agreement mistake
occasions
weading
and Correct your spelling
weddings
birthday
will help to keep Fix the agreement mistake
birthdays
its
value alive for future Correct pronoun usage
their
generation
.
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generations
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summarise, taking the evidence into consideration, it is good to adopt Correct your spelling
To
western
clothing; Capitalize word
Western
nevertheless
, ones
should always know and try to protect the traditional values.Replace the word
one
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear, single idea that directly supports the main argument. For instance, the introduction could be slightly more specific about the contrast between western and traditional clothes.
coherence cohesion
Improve grammatical accuracy by refining sentence structure and verb tenses. For example, 'To commence, one of the major reasons to follow western dressing pattern is that, it looks advanced and updated that catches an eye of people.'
task achievement
The essay attempts to address both parts of the question and demonstrates a balanced view of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are appropriately structured and convey the essay's main points.
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