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the graph below gives inforamation about the percentage of the poplualtion for four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below gives inforamation about the percentage of the poplualtion for four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
illustares
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illustrates
 the data about
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the estimated
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 number of urban residents of four Asian countries in 2024
comparing
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compared
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 to the
population
 of cities in 1970.
Overall
, a growing tendency can be indicated in all four
contries
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percentage
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percentages
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 of
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people living in urban
ereas
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areas
 toward 2040. It is evident from the data that the percentage of
Philippinines
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Philippines
 and
Mallaysian
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Malaysian
citiy
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city
 residents resonated (nearly 30%) in 1970.
While
 the trend seems to soar in the total
population
 of
urben
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urban
 citizens in Mallaysia by 80%,
Phinippinies
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Philippines
expereinced
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experienced
 a drop
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approximatly
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approximately
 45% in 2010, so its predicted
population
 is lower than Mallaysia in 2040 (60%).
Additionally
, in 1970, Thailand and Indonesia both had between 10 to 20% urban
population
. The predictions
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 the trend keeps rising sharply until 2040 in Indonesia by almost 60%.
However
, the numbers increase steadily in Thailand and the estimated
population
 will be around 50%. In conclusion, the given diagram shows a plummet in the number of people who tend to live in cities .
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Furthermore
 the
predicitions
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predictions
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represent
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 a growth in the percentage of
urban
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the urban
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population
 by the year 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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