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The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Water cycle

The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Water cycle
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The two graphics represent the
rain
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water
 cycle in
human inhabited
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human-inhabited
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as well as
un inhabited
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uninhabited
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 regions
in
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 the planet .
Furthermore
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 it shows the variations in each
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process in between both places
Overall
 , in the
human occupied
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 regions
the
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underground erosion is more , meanwhile evaporation and transpiration are less .
whereas
 in the
non inhabited
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 region transpiration and evaporation
is
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 more and increased
water
infilteration
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infiltration
 to the ground In the jungle terrain more
water
infilterates
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infiltrates
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 into the soil ,
as a
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 the base flow is not much affected .
Whereas
 in areas with buildings
infilteration
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infiltration
 to underground is reduced , causing more polluted
run off
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runoff
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water
 .
This
 same reason causes more underground erosion in the cities. In the terrain with buildings evaporation and transpiration are less compared to that of the greener lands. leading to less
infilteration
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infiltration
 to the ground .
Due to
this
 the base flow is less inducing greater erosion
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  • Precipitation
  • Absorption
  • Groundwater recharge
  • Evapotranspiration
  • Surface runoff
  • Impervious surfaces
  • Concrete
  • Asphalt
  • Stormwater systems
  • Vegetation
  • Water vapor
  • Local climate conditions
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