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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given map illustrates the changes that have been made
of
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to
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a
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the
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bookstore
 from 2000 to
present
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the present
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 day. The
bookstore
 in 2000 presented a number of book
section
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sections
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, right in front of the entrance could be found the travel and the new
books
sections
 and in
left
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the left
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 corner you notice the fiction
books
.
While
,
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 in the right corner there is the service desk.
Also
 in the center of the
bookstore
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bookstore,
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 you would find the art, hobbies, and cookery book
sections
. It can be seen now that the
bookstore
make
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made
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 some improvements, one of them was to remove the
sections
 that could be found in the
center
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 and replace them with tables,
while
 the art, hobbies, and cookery
books
 were placed next
the
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 fiction section. Over the period the non-fiction area has turned into a cafe shop,
whereas
 the service desk
and
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the travel
books
 and the new
books
sections
 remained in the same place as no changes
where
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were
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 made there.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bookstore, books, sections with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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