The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words

The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words
Statistics have shown the percentage of
technology
that most
of
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the
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people
in the U.S have used from 1995 to 1999
..
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Changes in
people
's
live
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lives
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has
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have
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improved with the help of
the
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technology
.
Overall
, in the year 1999, most
of
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the
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people
in the U.S. used washing
machine
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machines
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which
has
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have
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been considered
as
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very useful from
data
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the data
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provided
while
only
few
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users utilized the DVD player. The use of
the
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technology
has persistently increased except for the DVD player which along the cline has the most
declinig
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decline
percentage. With the span
the
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years given, the phone has significantly increased compared to other
thecnology
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technology
used.
First,
from 1995 to 1996, all of the
technology
used
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increased to approximately 10% except for the DVD player which
has
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decreased to 10%. Among
of
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the
technology
used between 1995 and 1999, the phone was the only
technology
which has increased to around 50%. Meanwhile, the washing machine remained the
technology
which most of the
people
used from 1995 to 1999.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words technology, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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