The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words
Statistics have shown the percentage of
technology
that most of
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apply
the
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apply
people
in the U.S have used from 1995 to 1999..
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...
people
's live
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lives
has
improved with the help of Correct subject-verb agreement
have
the
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apply
technology
.
Overall
, in the year 1999, most of
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apply
the
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apply
people
in the U.S. used washing machine
which Fix the agreement mistake
machines
has
been considered Correct subject-verb agreement
have
as
very useful from Change preposition
apply
data
provided Correct article usage
the data
while
only few
users utilized the DVD player. The use of Change the article
a few
the
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apply
technology
has persistently increased except for the DVD player which along the cline has the most declinig
percentage. With the span Correct your spelling
decline
the
years given, the phone has significantly increased compared to other Change preposition
of the
thecnology
used.
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technology
First,
from 1995 to 1996, all of the technology
used has
increased to approximately 10% except for the DVD player which Unnecessary verb
apply
has
decreased to 10%. Among Unnecessary verb
apply
of
the Change preposition
apply
technology
used between 1995 and 1999, the phone was the only technology
which has increased to around 50%. Meanwhile, the washing machine remained the technology
which most of the people
used from 1995 to 1999.Submitted by dhowardjacob on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words technology, people with synonyms.
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