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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000
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The given bar chart illustrates information about charity  three types of  India's domestic products between the time period 40 years.   At one glance,
proposition
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the proposition
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 of Agriculture accounted for
highest
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the highest
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 proposition, except
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Industry
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 and
Services
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, as these figures faced a decline.     The fraction of Agriculture started
with
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 nearly 62% in
the
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1960,
while
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 their proposition declined from 1970 to 2000. From approximately 55% to nearly 45% in the
year
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 1980,
at
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final
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year
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, from exactly 30% to 15% .    Contrary to that, The figures
of
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Industry
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 and
Services
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 began at
period
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roughly
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 15% and just about 17%  respectively.
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, began
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 increase  from 20% to 22%, from  22% to 27% in order,
between
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 the time period
10
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of 10
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year
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. In
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1990,
Industry
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 remained the same,
whereas
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, the fraction of
Services
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 jumped
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 45%. In the final
year
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,
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Industry
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the Industry
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 peaked at 62%, but
Services
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 remained the the same again 
22
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%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, services, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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