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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#look #graphics #show #data #people #years #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The bar graph illustrates different
kind
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kinds
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 of
books
 read by
people
 aged from 16 to 29 and the table graph displays data about
book
 reading in 2012.
Overall
, the highest
number
 of
people
 who
readed
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read
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books
was
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were
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 young
people
 .
And the
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The
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 most popular type of
book
 was print
book
while
 the least was audiobook.
To begin
 with
bar
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a bar
the bar
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 chart, the most popular type of
books
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book
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 for three
group
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groups
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 of
people
 ( 16-17, 18-24 and 25-29)
was
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were
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print
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a print
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book
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books
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about
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apply
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(about 90% about 75% and just above 70%
resectively
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respectively
).
In
addition
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addition,
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people
 aged 16-17 had above 25% on
e-
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e-books
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book
while
 both other groups ( 18-24 and 25-29) had similar
percentage
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percentages
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 in both
e-
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e-books
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book
 and
audiobook
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audiobooks
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 ( about 15% and just under 20%).
Table
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The table
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 shows the
number
 of
book
reading
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read
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, first age group from 16-17 had the highest
number
 of
book
 reading with average
books
 12,
while
 both other groups had
similar
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a similar
the similar
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number
 of
books
 11.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, people, book, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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