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The table shows information about department stores and online stores in Australia in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows information about department stores and online stores in Australia in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table gives information about offline
stores
 and online
stores
 in Australia in years 2011. There are several aspects
such
 as
amount
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the amount
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 of business, profit and sales revenue that
calculated
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are calculated
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 in AUD,
also
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as well as
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 its growth.
Overall
, in every
aspects
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aspect
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 that
was assess
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, online
stores
always
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are always
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 higher than
department
stores
. First of all, in
number
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a number
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 of
business's
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business
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 criteria, offline
stores
 got 67. Meanwhile, online
stores
 got four times bigger which was 368. On the other aspects, both have different profits. On the one hand,
department
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the department
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 store had
profit
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a profit
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807
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of 807
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 Australian
dollar
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dollars
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. In
this
 case, the difference is not far, online
stores
 had 863 AUD.
In other words
, the difference
only
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is only
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 57 Australian
dollar
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dollars
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. In different
case
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cases
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,
department
stores
 and online
stores
 had a slight differentiation in
criteria
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the criteria
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 of sales revenue. Respectively, 12.700 and 13.400.
Last
, the growth of
department
stores
 was 0.4 per cent. On the other
sides
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side
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, online
stores
was
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were
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 0.6 per cent. The gap is not significant.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores, department with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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