The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida
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table gives information about , the average wages for
people
who are under the age of 18 and over the age of 60 and the percentage of the suburb's ratio in three cities which are California, Utah and Florida in the US. The local currency is Dollar.
Overall
, the Californian
people
have more income, as opposed to the Utal contains the highest numbers of poor
people
. At first glance, we can say that
people
who are under the age of 18 have a higher ratio than older
people
in terms of earning money . When it comes to average income , The Californian
people
obtain 23 thousand dollars in the US , the Utal
people
can not gain more money compared to California.
Besides
, Utal is a developed city because it has the smallest percentage of %9
people
who
are
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live in misery , on
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the Californian
people
do not have enough hardships.
Finally
, the Florida city contains just at a ratio % of 12 poor
people
even ıf one person has 22 .000 dollar average wage in the US.
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