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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Describe a memorable experience you've had in or with nature, such as a hike, a visit to a park, or an encounter with animals. Include specific details in your response.

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Lat
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Last
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 year, I got the chance to
traveled
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 with my university friends towards
th
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the
 northern areas of Pakistan.
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, we
visted
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visited
 the place known as Kashmir, it is
such
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 a heaven on earth. In
Kashmir
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Kashmir,
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 we hike the huge
mountain
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 the
mountain
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 name
as
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K2 known as the
famous
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most famous
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mountain
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of
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in
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 the world. But
hike
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hiked
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 for
atleast
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at least
 two hours and after that we all got tired it
is
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first
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the first
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 time that I was
experiening
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experienced
the
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 hike in the mountains
along side
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 the river and having suc a beautiful
envirnment
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environment
.
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 but not
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least,
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this
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hiking with my friends
is
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such
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 a beautiful experience of my life
also
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 the most
Important
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 part is that in the
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mountain
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mountains
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 we encountered the natural animal of our country known
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as
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 Deer.
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 scene
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make
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 our day
vey
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very
 special. After completing my tour. I have
understanding
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how
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of how
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the
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different
peoples
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people
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 live in places like mountains
how
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and how
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 they
changing
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 their living style
according to
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weather
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the weather
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.
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 how
the
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hardworking
peoples
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people
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they
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are because they work very hard for their basic needs.
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 experience
boost
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the
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 will level
in
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myself
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and I believe that
the Human
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humans
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 can
anything
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do anything
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 in the world with
little
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a little
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ecourage
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encouragement
 and patience.

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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea to improve logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your introduction and conclusion clearly highlight the main points of your experience to enhance reader comprehension.
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Use more varied and precise vocabulary to clearly articulate your thoughts and emotions about the experience.
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Address grammatical and spelling errors to improve overall clarity and readability.
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You included relevant and specific details that make your experience vivid and engaging.
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Your personal reflections on the experience provide depth and insight into what you learned.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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