Write a follow-up response for 3 minutes. Reflect on how this memorable experience with nature affected or changed your awareness or understanding of the environment. Include specific details in your respons

After completing my tour. I have an understanding of how different
peoples
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live in places like mountains
how
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and how
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they
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their living style
according to
weather
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.
Also
how
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hardworking
peoples
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they
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are because they work very hard for their basic needs.
This
experience
boost
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the
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will level
in
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myself
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and I believe that
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humans
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can
anything
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in the world with
little
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a little
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ecourage
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encouragement
and patience.
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structural
Your response includes important reflections on your experience, but it could be organized more clearly. Try to start with an introduction to the topic, expand on each main point with details, and then conclude with a summary of your reflection.
language
Make sure to use complete sentences and check for grammatical accuracy. For example, 'Also how the hardworking peoples they are' could be rephrased to 'Also, I observed how hardworking the people are.'
content
Using specific examples can help bolster your points. For example, you could elaborate on specific tasks people performed or challenges they faced.
content
The reflection on how different people adapt to their environment shows good insight into human resilience and adaptability.
insight
Your conclusion on boosting willpower and believing in human potential is motivational and adds personal depth to your reflection.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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