The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967, and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967, and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates information about the
students
enrolling
to
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Manchester
University in 1937, and 2017.
Overall
, both the proportion of
female
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females
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and the
number
of new
students
who enrolled increased from 1937 to 2017.
Whereas
the proportion of
male
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males
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dropped from 1937 to 2017. The
percentage
coming from
oversea
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in general is less than that of the
percentage
coming within 40 miles of
Manchester
except from the year 2017.
Firstly
,
Manchester
University experienced a growth in the
number
of student
enrolment
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enrolments
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from 327 in 1937 to 1183 in 1967. From 1967 to 2017, it rose dramatically from 1133 to 6254.
This
means that the
number
of new
students
enrolling increased by a total
number
of 5927 from 1937 to 2017.
Secondly
, the
percentage
of
female
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females
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is
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35% in 1967. It
then
reached a peak of 55% in 2017. In comparison, the
percentage
of
male
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males
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inn
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1967 is 65%.
Nevertheless
, it suffered a slight fall to 45% in 2017.
Thirdly
, the proportion of
students
who came from near
Manchester
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1-2% in 2017 which is a small
per cent
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percentage
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comparing
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compared
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to that of 32% from
oversea
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overseas
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, manchester, number, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • increase/decrease in student numbers
  • post-war baby boom
  • globalization
  • technological advancement
  • education accessibility
  • demographic changes
  • overseas students
  • gender representation in education
  • international reputation
  • higher education
  • university capacity
  • social factors
  • economic influences
  • political factors
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