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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The first pie
chart
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 illustrates, how a typical Australian family uses
energy
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, and the
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chart
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 displays the greenhouse gas emissions that come from that
energy
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 use.
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, there are six households provided. Heating had the highest percentage of
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 usage by families,
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 water heating had the largest proportion of
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greenhouse
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 gas emissions.
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 the first graph, 42% of
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 consumed by Australian families in heating, which is the highest percentage in
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, next to
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 the
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 place is for water heating with 32%.
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, other appliances are 15% and the rest including refrigeration, lighting and cooling are 7%,4% and 2% respectively. In the
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 graph, water heating emitted more than 30% of greenhouse gases,
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, in comparison with refrigeration and lightning both are used doubled in the
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chart
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.
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, the lowest proportion is cooling with 3% and heating and other appliances are 18% and 28% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, second with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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