The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990
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The given bar graphs depict the different levels of student involvement in various sectors which held among developing and industrialized
countries
in the time period between 1980 and 1990.
Overall
, it is apparent that
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Industrialized regions had the highest level of participation in all sectors
such
as education, science and research for both years. It is clear from the chart that the participation in education from developing nations was around 2 in 1980 and 3 in 1990.
On the contrary
, the industrialized sector in average schooling rapidly increased to 8 in 1980 and 10 in 1990.
Similarly
, the number of developing
countries
in the science domain was low when compared to industrialized
countries
in both years. Precisely, 40 in 1980 which soared to approximately 70 in 1990 In the research and development stream, the level of engagement was below 50 in 1980 and 1990 for developing
countries
,
whereas
the industrialized
countries
depict that the level dramatically raised to 150 in 1980 and 400 in 1990.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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