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The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. Write a report describing the information in the graph below.

The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. Write a report describing the information in the graph below.
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The graph below illustrates the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries Between 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that in 1990 was the highest
of
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while
 in 2000 was the lowest. Oman and S. Arabia
were
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 the
biggest
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 of number fertility
rate
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. On the one hand, Looking
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at
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 detail, Oman was
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bigger at 7
1990
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 than
2000
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 at approximately 5,3. And
then
 it
followed
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 by S. Arabia
were
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 bigger at amount
6,8
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 in 1990 than
2000
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 at about 52.
Moreover
, Qatar was more higher at 4,2 in 1990 than in 2000 at about 3,3. And addition, UAE in 1990 was
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bigger at 4 than in 2000 at just under 3.
On the other hand
, Regarding the lowest data, Kuwait was the bigger at amount
3,2
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 in 1990 than
2000
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2,5
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.
Furthermore
, Bahrain was
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higher at 3.2 in 1990
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2000
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 at about 2,2.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fertility rate
  • trend
  • significant increase
  • significant decrease
  • Gulf countries
  • data
  • analyze
  • compare
  • overall
  • individual country
  • highlight
  • predict
  • period
  • rate changes
  • decline
  • rise
  • fluctuate
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