The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two-line graphs display people using
a
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apply
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household
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appliance
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appliances
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for washing clothes, preparing food, and cleaning and the other graph shows
time
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spent using them to carry out the required
household
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activities
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in a country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, owning appliances in 1920 seems to be very low , especially refrigerators, but over a period of
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owning them gradually grew and seems to
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reached its top mainly with refrigerators from 1980 to 2019 which was way low compared to
a washing
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washing machines
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machines
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, and
vacuum
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cleaners
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in 1920.
Along with
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this
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time
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spent on housework gradually decreased from 1920 to 2019. In 1920 purchasing electric appliances was below 50% especially owning fridges was below 10%.
Whereas
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washing
machines
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and
vacuum
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cleaners
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are as close to around 30 and 40%. The
time
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spent on
household
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activities
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was in and around 50%. But these steadily decrease over the
time
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period from 1920 to 1960.
This
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was
due to
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the fact that owning appliances surged from 1940. Between 1940 and 2000 owning fridges were sky rocketed above 50% in 1940 and reached almost 90% in 1960.
Whereas
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washing
machines
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and
vacuum
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cleaners
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were steadily increasing between the approximate range of 50 to 80%.
As a result
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, a sudden drop in
time
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spent on
household
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activities
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was seen.
Then
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in the following years washing
machines
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saw a slight drop and increase reaching around 75% in 2019.
In contrast
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, a steady increase was seen in
vacuum
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cleaners
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till 1980 and
then
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both refrigerators and
cleaners
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reached 100% by 2000 and continued to be the same till 2019.
Also
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, the effect of
time
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taken to carry out
household
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activities
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was decreasing consistently reaching 20% in 1969 and
then
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a marginal decrease between 20 to 10% over the
time
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period of 1980 to 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words household, time, activities, machines, vacuum, cleaners with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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