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Some people think that language school be taught in small classes, while other people think the number of students in a language class does not matter. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today’s world, many people argue that
language
 school which given in
the
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small group can
be affect
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for
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their student’s abilities.
Whereas
 the others think that the amount of
students
 in the
class
 does not
give
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 any impact. In my point of view, the small
classes
 could be more
effectively
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 for many
students
.
However
,
this
 essay will discuss both of the arguments in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, in
term
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 of the quality of learning a
language
, it can be clearly seen that
students
 should do more practice and get personal feedback from their mentors precisely to
being
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succeed. Teachers who teach in
small
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 number of
students
 will give more
chance
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 for
students
 to do the kind of practice and have more flexibility to assess all of the student’s abilities.
However
, mostly, all of the
school
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schools
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 which conduct
in
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small
classes
 have experienced pricier than the big
classes
.
On the other hand
, the
language
class
 being formed of a bigger number of
students
 should not be focused. Because when the
class
 consist of more people it means more distractions should be made in that
class
.
Moreover
, in the big
classes
, the teacher cannot be able to check all of the progress of their
students
.
Furthermore
,
students
 cannot do more practice one-on-one optimally with their teachers. It should impact
for
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their progress
especially
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 for their active skills
such
 as speaking and writing.
In contrast
, the
big
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 number of
students
 in a
class
 usually
offer
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more affordable than the small groups.
To sum up
, both of the views have their own merits and demerits.
However
, the small
classes
 in learning of
language
 should be more positive and more beneficial for
students
 who
wants
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 to improve their skills speedily.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized feedback
  • customize lessons
  • learning speeds
  • participating actively
  • better comprehension
  • classroom management
  • resource allocation
  • social learning
  • collaborative skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • cost efficiency
  • peer learning
  • real-world scenarios
  • educational institutions
  • extracurricular activities
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