The diagram below shows the foor plan of a public hibrary 20 years ago and how it looks now Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the foor plan of a public hibrary 20 years ago and how it looks now 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
report derives from the above maps which enumerate a public bookstore 20 years ago and now. As an initial overview, the entrance is on the same side as the
library
. Not only is
this
point clear, but
also
fiction books used to have a wide space 20 years ago;
nevertheless
, now it has some shelves
besides
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the info desk. Notably, the tables and chairs which were located in the centre of the
library
have been removed, providing a spacious space in
the
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front of the entrance gate.
Additionally
, a cafe has been opened
instead
of the enquiry desk.
Next,
right above the cafe, you will find the information desk, adult fantasy books, and three machines for self-service.
Moreover
, the children's
room
has been relocated to the left top of the
library
, and now it provides sofas and a storytelling corner.
Besides
, there is no longer a reading
room
;
however
, the
library
provides a
room
for lectures and sessions opposite the adult's imagination bookshelves.
Finally
, the bookstore provides a computer
room
for research and it is situated in the same
room
that newspapers and magazines used to be in.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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