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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates all phases of
development
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the development
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 of ladybugs and their anatomy.
Overall
, there are 4 stages of growing, starting from the egg stage and ending with the
adult
 insect.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
,
according to
 the graph after each metamorphose, the body of
lady
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the
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bird
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ladybird
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 has some significant dissimilarities with other stages of development.
To begin
 with, in the
begining
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beginning
, there are a plethora of eggs on the leaf, that
stays
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stay
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 there for 2-5 days.
Then
, in the second phase, larvae which came from the egg
is surviving
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survive
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 for 3
week
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weeks
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 to settle on the leaf and become a pupa for a week.
Finaly
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Finally
, there is an
adult
 exemplar of a
lady bird
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ladybird
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.
Moreover
, the graph shows, that the
adult
 insect is considerably different from its previous appearance.
Firstly
, it has
red
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a red
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 elytra, that crowds its wings and abdomen.
Moreover
, compared to the other phases, on the head of an
adult
 ladybug, there are two antennas.
However
, there is
also
 a
simmilarity
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similarity
 with larvae as they both have six legs.
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