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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in the UK and the number of Indian restaurants in the UK between 1960 and 2015.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in the UK and the number of Indian restaurants in the UK between 1960 and 2015.
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The pie chart compares and contrasts data about the
take away
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takeaway
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 dishes from different nations which were
favored
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favoured
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 by
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British
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british
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British
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 people and the
barchart
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bar chart
 illustrates
indian
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Indian
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 restaurant numbers
were
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apply
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operated in
this
 country over the period of 55 years between 1960 and 2015
overall
chinese
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Chinese
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 and
indian
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Indian
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 cuisines were
prefered
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preferred
 the most and that
reflect
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reflects
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 the increase in
the
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apply
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indian
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Indian
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restaurants
.
Number
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A number
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 of
indian
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Indian
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restaurants
 was low from 1960 to 1980
it
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only 500
restaurants
 opened in 1960 and in 1980 is 3000.From 1980 to 2000 the
number
 of
indian
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Indian
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restaurants
 was
significant
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a significant
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 increase in 1980 is only 3000
restaurants
 but in 2000 it up to 8000
restauran
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restaurants
restaurant
.From 2000 to 2015 the
number
 of
indian
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Indian
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restaurants
 was
increase
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increased
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 but at a slower rate,
highlight
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highlighting
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 the peak
number
 of
restaurants
is
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was
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 9000 in 2009. In the
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piechart,
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piechart
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pie chart
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 we can see UK people take away a meal in
indian
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Indian
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 and
chinese
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Chinese
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 more than another.The lower
country
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countries
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is
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are
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mexican
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Mexican
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,japanese and greak
that
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apply
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show
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shows
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 us UK people didn’t favourite a meal
of
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in
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there
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their
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 country. In
sumary
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summary
,The bar chart demonstrates The
number
 of
indian
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Indian
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restaurants
 operating in the UK from 1980 to 2015.By the end of the
period
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period,
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 the
number
 of
indian
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Indian
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 had reached its highest point
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indian, restaurants, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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