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What are the advantages and disadvantages of going to live or study abroad?

Leaving overseas from your own nation to live or study can open many doors for your professional skills in working.
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, in some
situations
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 it might lead to misunderstandings between cultures. The main advantage
to
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of
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 moving abroad is that
an individuals
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individuals
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 in a new place will develop their skills in their profession. When people go to
another countries
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another country
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 they learn something unusual for them. Meanwhile, leaving to live in another state gives them more practice and new information and details which they hadn’t in
own
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their own
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 republic.
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, millions of students in Kazakhstan are moving to another civilization
for studying
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to study
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 and
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 better qualifications in their professions,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 the government pays for their subjects in
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apply
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Universities. The main drawback
in
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 a country leaving
for living
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to live
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 abroad is cultural misunderstandings. Every country has their own cultures and different people,
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neighbor
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 nations are not equal in everything too. When a person starts to live in
other
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another
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 nation it will be issues with other’s
behaviors
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behaviours
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 and with the mentality of
other’s
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other
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counties
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countries
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.
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, in Russia thousands of people who went to Uzbekistan,
Mongolia
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and Mongolia
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 are coming back,
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 problems with cultural differences. In conclusion, moving to another country to live or study can upgrade your skills in a job.
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, it can
arise
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raise
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 social issues in the new place.

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language use
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Provide more specific examples to support your ideas. It will add depth to your arguments and make them more convincing.
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Try to carry out a more detailed discussion of advantages and disadvantages. This will demonstrate a thorough understanding of the essay topic.
structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that frame the discussion well.
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The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages, showing a balanced perspective.

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