Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Agree with first one apart from that some people wants to know foreign culture and history

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Some individuals say that
people
want to learn
foreign
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language
only for
travel
as well as
work purposes. Others state that
,
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people
could learn a
foriegn
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foreign
language
for other purposes too. I agree with the latter point, some
people
wants
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to learn a foreign
language
to live
in
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abroad
while
studying and
explore
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their lifestyle beside only for
job
and
travel
. Many individuals learn a foreign
language
for only
job
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as well as
for
travel
. There are numerous jobs in the market which
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talented
people
outside
from
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their pool and provide a good
job
salary with benefits .
Beside
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this
,
people
learn a new
language
to communicate with foreigners
while
travelling.
For example
,
people
should know
french
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French
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in order to get
the
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jobs in
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Montreal
,Canada.
Also
, tourist needs to know
little
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a little
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french
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French
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in order to communicate with local
people
because they do not understand
english
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. Others say that
people
should learn a foreign
language
for living
puproses
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purposes
too . Most
of
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the
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people
also
like
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
a lifestyle
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of
foriegn
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foreign
countries so they want to enrol in a school
for
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to
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study
while
living in a
foriegn
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foreign
country permanently .
For example
, many immigrants
comes
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to Canada
for
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to
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study and plan to stay here permanently because they want to adapt
this
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western
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lifestyle .
Moreover
, students
also
come abroad to do master's so they will have enough experience for skill jobs.
Therefore
, there are so many reasons behind only
travel
and
job
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jobs
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in which
people
get motivated to learn a new
language
. In conclusion , some say that
people
should learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
in order to do
travel
and
job
but
according to
my opinion ,
people
should learn a new
language
for study purposes
as well as
living standards too.
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