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The diagrams show how the layout of a school library changed.

The diagrams show how the layout of a school library changed.
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The maps illustrate, the developments of layout which took
places
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 in a school
library
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 in 5 years.
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, a comparison of
two
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 maps reveals a complete transformation from
state
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a state
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 of affairs to
modern
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a modern
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 shape. The
library
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 was a bit comfortable zone for
user
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users
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 with several tables and some rooms but during the next 5 years, the school
library
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 saw a number of significant changes. The most noticeable is that the amount
if
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of
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 studying tables
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are increase
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 and called
as
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private learning benches.
Moreover
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, one of the
bookshelf
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altered
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to
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 a long desk which is available for pupils
use
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 their
laptop
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laptops
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 on it,
in addition
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such
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 kind of facilities
also
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has
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the
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a
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 top on the right side of
layout
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the layout
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.
By contrast
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, there were 3 types of
room
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rooms
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in
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on
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 the left bottom side of
layout
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the layout
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, during 5 years borrowing and returning
room
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rooms
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 separated two rooms and
recording
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a recording
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 studio appeared
instead
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 of
classroom
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the classroom
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.
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Also
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 a
library
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 office that
placed
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is placed
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 in
northern
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the northern
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 east is named to
conference
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the conference
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 room.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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