Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped?
There are many causes of global poverty, and they are usually related to socio-economic factors,
such
as the unequal distribution of resources, conflicts and wars, low levels of education, etc. However
, I believe that the main two problems
are corruption and the reluctance of leaders to really address the problem
of poverty.
First,
if efforts are made to fight corruption, many of the state's economic problems
will solve
themselves. Wrong verb form
be solved
For example
, on the money that a representative of the state “got” from the country's budget for him
wallet, it is possible to build a chicken farm, which, in turn, will provide Change the pronoun
his
population
with jobs, food for Add an article
the population
population
and food for exports. And this
, accordingly
, will bring growth to the state's economy.
Secondly
, more of the world's poor people live in countries where dictatorships exist. Such
as North Korea. When a country's leader became
Wrong verb form
becomes
is
in power for a long time - his ideas become Unnecessary verb
apply
Correct article usage
a crazer
crazer
. Because of Correct your spelling
crazier
craze
this
, the population
becomes poorer and dangerous. Begins the search for enemies. The authorities begin to fear their own population
, propaganda
is turned on, which broadcasts that the Correct word choice
and propaganda
problem
of everything is the neighbor
. In order to solve the Change the spelling
neighbour
problem
, it is necessary to destroy it. Society begins to militarize, which creates a danger of war for neighboring
states. Other countries may suffer as well.
Change the spelling
neighbouring
To conclude
, due to
if we decide Change preposition
apply
the
above Change preposition
on the
problems
, the world will be more socially sustainable, and the problem
of poverty will disappear. But, as we can see, the leaders of countries prefer not to notice the main world problems
, and to create and hide behind secondary tasks.Submitted by samedovateacher on
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