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The diagrams below show a structure used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a structure used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagrams illustrate information concerning how tides produce household electric
system
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systems
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 through the given invention and how it takes advantage
from
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the
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natural movements.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the artificial system is located near the cliff or sea wall and there are technology and natural mechanisms related to
this
 process. Starting
with
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the gadget components and their functions,
it
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comprises
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of
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3 primary parts.
Firstly
, it is
triangle
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a triangle
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 tide barrier formed by stainless steel with
curve
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a curve
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 chamber in the middle. Based on
this
 following shape, it can
absorp
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absorb
 tide power and push air current into the turbine.
Secondly
, the rotating turbine can activate the electric engine by its connected wiring systems.
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Third
, the column with
wide
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a wide
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 mouth is made to create reverse
air-flow
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air flow
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 which is
be
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explained in the second diagram. With regard to the second diagram, once the wave has
pull
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 out, the
airs
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air
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 down, so that the turbine is
acivate
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activate
activated
 again.
Due to
this
 movement, which is
the
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 same direction as before,
the
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electricity is produced.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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