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Band 5

You are planning a two-week vacation, and need someone to take care of your house while you are away. Write a letter to your neigbour. In your letter: tell your neighbour that you are going away ask your neighbour to take care of your house for you explain what task you would like your neighbour to do

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Dear neighbour. I told you before, our family have a plan that we
going
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go
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to
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on
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holiday
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a holiday
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 trip to South Korea for two weeks.
This
 travel a short term, only we have enough time for winter break of my kids. We will be absent
during
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for
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 half
month
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a month
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. So I would like to ask you to take care
my
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of my
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 house. The
accomodation
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accommodation
 is a little similar to your home. We will swich off the some equipments,
such
 as TV, freezer, washing machine, e.t.c. and I can closed all of the windows and curtains.
However
, here still
left
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connected
the
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 internet. because our outside camera should
be work
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 for online. More
important
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, there are
have
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so many live plants, especially my lovely flowers. I am worrying
to
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about
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 them. in
the
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fact, I want to
do
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water my plants
each
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 five days. Obviously, you should come
my
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to my
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 home at least three times.The door has
electron
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an electron
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 lock, I have
sending
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 you the
four digit
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 number for
text
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a text
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 message. Of course, If you need a car, I keep
the
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my
mersedes
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Mercedes
benz
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 in the garage.The key
of
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to
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car
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a car
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left
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 on the shelf in the garage. I hope, you can do it, Thank you Sincerely.
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, consider organizing your letter into clearer paragraphs. For example, one paragraph can be used to explain that you are going away, another to ask for the favor, and a third to specify the tasks.
task achievement
I noticed some grammar and spelling errors. Try to proofread your letter to catch things like 'mersedes benz' instead of 'Mercedes Benz' and 'I can closed' instead of 'I can close.'
suitable writing tone
Your letter is polite and maintains a friendly tone, which is appropriate for the task.
complete response
You provide clear instructions on what tasks your neighbor should do, which helps achieve the task response.
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