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The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf countries from 1990 and 2000

The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf countries from 1990 and 2000
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The graph outlines the fertility number of
female
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 in different 6 countries
Bahrain
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, 
Kuwait
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, Qatar, Omon, S.
Arabia
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 and UAE between 1990 and 2000. Looking
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an
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overall
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 perspective it is readily apparent that 2 countries Oman and S.
Arabia
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  were predominant in both
of
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years
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while
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 the figures of
Bahrain
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 and
Kuwait
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 faced a downward trend.
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 of the 10 years in
fertility
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the fertility
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 rate of women Oman remained predominant followed by S.
Arabia
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, Qatar, UEA,
Kuwait
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 and
Bahrain
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. In 1990, the figure of Oman started the period meaningfully higher than other countries in fertility before taking a nosedive to nearly 5.5 in 2000.
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 that time S.
Arabia
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 level and it showed little fluctuation of  1  decline in 2000.
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 the figures 
of
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 Qatar and UAE were 4.5 and 4 respectively, 
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 they dropped  marginally
3.5
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 and 3 over the given period of time.
Bahrain
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 and
Kuwait
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not
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 observed a significant dwindle despite remaining less popular in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bahrain, kuwait, arabia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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