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The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#changes #asian #elephants #information #features #comparisons
These bar charts
shows
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show
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 the
population
 of Asian
elephant
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elephants
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 in the year 1994 to 2007. It
clear
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is clear
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 that
indian's
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Indian
 elephants have the highest
rate
while
china's
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China's
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 elephants have the lowest
rate
.
According to
 what
shown
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is shown
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 , we can see that in 1994 Vietnam ,Malaysia ,Laos and Thailand
have
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had
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 a
smilar
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similar
 number range around 1000-1500 .
While
china
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China
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has
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had
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 the lowest number in 1994 about 500.
On the other hand
 ,the highest elephant
population
 is in
india
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India
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by
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apply
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7500. The
secound
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second
 highest
rate
 goes to
Mayanmar
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Myanmar
 by about 4700 .
Furthermore
 ,
SriLanka
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Sri Lanka
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 has
number
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a number
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 close to 2700 . In comparison with 2004,
india
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India
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 have the
upper
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highest
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population
 ever near to 10000.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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 china has only 1000.
Moreover
 , Vietnam , Cambodia and Laos have
a
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apply
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related numbers close to 1000-1200.
As well as
 Malaysia and
SriLanka
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Sri Lanka
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 have a similar
rate
 near to 3000.
In addition
 ,
Mayanmar
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the Mayan
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population
get
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apply
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rise
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rose
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 to 5300 and Thailand
growth
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grew
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 to 3800.
To sum up
 , we
cloud
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can
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 say that Cambodia is the only country that has
a
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had a
show examples
drop
since
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in
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 the years .
While
 all other countries have
a
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an
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 increasing with
diffrence
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different
 numbers.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trend
  • decline
  • increase
  • decrease
  • population
  • significant
  • dramatic
  • stability
  • data
  • estimate
  • notable
  • comparative
  • contrast
  • approximately
  • maximum
  • over the period
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