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The graph below show the population of Chile by age group between 1975 and 2035.

The graph below show the population of Chile by age group between 1975 and 2035.
The line graph illustrates the change in the Chilean population by
age
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 from 1975 to 2015 and its’
expectation
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expectations
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 in 2025 and 2035. At the beginning of the period, Chile had the majority of the 15-64
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group
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, with
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almost
 40% of the 0-14
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group
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 and about 5% of the oldest
age
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group
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 (65 years and over).
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, since 1985, the
proportion
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 of the
age
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group
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 of 15 to 64 years old started to decline sharply. At the same time, the percentage of the oldest members of the society began to increase gradually.
In addition
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,
this
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 shift is expected to accelerate the increase in the
proportion
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 of the elderly
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 by 2025 and 2035. The percentage of the youngest
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 will dip notably over the course of
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time.
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, it is predicted that the
proportion
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 of the youngest will almost be equal to
those
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 of the oldest
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 by 2035. Meanwhile, the
middle aged
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middle-aged
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group
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 rose to 70% by 2015
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 and will
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estimate
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 to dwindle to 60% by 2035.
Overall
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, the line graph demonstrates that the
proportion
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 of the youngest
group
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 is expected to experience a notable decrease,
while
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 the percentage of the oldest
group
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 is set to skyrocket by 2025 and 2035.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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