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The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the thoughts of London people about life in their city over
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 years examined.
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, there was a decrease in the proportion of how people think about the range of shops, job opportunities, the diversity of population, and nightlife,
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 the opposite trends were seen in the remaining two categories.
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, London citizens are most satisfied with their city's diversity of shops. The figure for the range of shops started at 45%, after which it experienced a slight decline to nearly 42%. A similar change was witnessed in nightlife, which decreased from 25% to about 22%. The figure for job chances was at around 38% in
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 one, followed by a gradual decrease to 35% in both
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 two and
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 three. Meanwhile, people have the most stable satisfaction with the mixture of population, with the percentage of it ranging from around 37% to 35% in the three years examined. About 22% of Londoners loved their city's museums and art galleries in
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 one, with a subsequent marginal increase to nearly 26% in the final
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. The figure for transport started at 22% and increased to 35%
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 of the period despite a small fall in
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 two (20%).
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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