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The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart compares data about the
people
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 who have different drinking habits in the USA per age.
Overall
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, the number of young generations who do not drink is more than old
people
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.
In addition
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,
light
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 drinks and heavy drinks are popular among younger
people
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;
however
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, old
people
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 prefer Ex-drink.
According to
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 the plot,
people
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 who are 16-24 age have a large section for no drinker
due to
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 the fact that it is 60%,
then
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 they like
light
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, Ex, and heavy respectively 25, 10,and 5per cent. Of the
people
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 between 25-34, most of them, do not drink because it has 55%, and use
light
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 and heavy drinks 22% and 3% more than the prior group, but Ex-
drinkers
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 area 5% decline from the past. the third one is for
people
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 who are between 35 and 44. these inhabitants like other groups have a massive percentage of No
drinkers
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 and have the same percentage in
this
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 section as teenagers;
moreover
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, the respective on other items is the same as the previous group, but the number of
light
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 is 10% less and the heavy has 5% increase. The graph shows
people
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 who are more than 45 years old we can see the number of no
drinkers
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 is reduced owing to the fact that
people
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 between 45-54 have 55%, 55-64 has 50%, and 65-74 has 45%.
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, the figure for Ex-drinker climbed inasmuch as the first group had 10;
then
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 25, and
finally
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, 40%.
Furthermore
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, heavy and
light
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drinkers
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 have the same trend as never
drinkers
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 on account of the fact that they had 15 and 20; after that, changed to 8 and 15;
thereafter
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, in the
last
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 section became 3 and 10.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, light, drinkers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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