The pie charts show the size of classes in primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the size of classes in primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the total quantity of
students
per class in primary schools in four
states
of
Australia
, namely New South Wales, South
Australia
,
Australia
Capital
Territory
, and Western
Australia
in the year
of
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2010. From an
overall
perspective,
Australia
's primary
classes
were mainly under 25
students
and the more-than-30-student
classes
were least common across all
states
.
Firstly
, looking at
classes
with 30
students
and more, the figures for those were 1% in
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Australia
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territory
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,
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and 4-5% in three other
states
.
Secondly
, in terms of 26-to-30-student
class
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classes
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,
these kind
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of
classes
came
the
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second least popular size in New South Wales and Western
Australia
with 33% and 27%, respectively
while
in
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Autralia
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Australia
Australian
Capital
Territory
,
this
category made up just
one tenth
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. The
classes
with 21 to 25 members accounted for the highest proportion in almost
states
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all states
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,
however
, South
Australia
was the exception at that time with just
one third
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.
Other
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favorite
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class
size
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sizes
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was less than 20
students
, which occupied a good percentage of 38% and 36% in
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the Australia
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Australia
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Australian
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Capital
Territory
and South
Australia
, respectively, and a quarter in New South Wales and
Wastern
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Western
Australia
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, states, australia, territory, classes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary school
  • class size
  • proportion
  • average
  • trends
  • small/medium/large classes
  • implications
  • quality of education
  • teacher workload
  • comparison
  • variance
  • state-by-state analysis
  • education policy
  • statistical representation
  • pie chart interpretation
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