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The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map gives information about changes in
Ryemouth
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 from 1995 to now.
Overall
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,
Ryemouth
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 did not experience significant differences. At first glance, we can say that the village had had a huge forest park and farmland previously,
whereas
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, today
Ryemouth
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 have a new tennis court and golf
area
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instead
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 of that.
Also
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 , it had a seaport in the year 1995 when it comes today it does not have a new venue
furthermore
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, a fish market and cafe were built in 1995,
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however
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however,
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 they were removed because a restaurant and hotel were constructed.
Besides
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, all housing
area
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 was located in the western of the
Ryemouth
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 in 1995
also
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 they remain nowadays in the sample location.
Finally
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, we can observe that local residents of
Ryemouth
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 do not have sufficient green areas and they could find a park
area
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 for their vehicles , today the
Ryemouth
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 residents have a park
area
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 which is located near the hotel.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ryemouth, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • land use
  • residential expansion
  • modernization effort
  • commercial
  • urban development
  • preserved
  • recreational areas
  • transportation infrastructure
  • eco-friendly
  • renovation
  • transformation
  • bike paths
  • car park
  • establishment
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