Education should be accessible to people of all economic background. All levels of education, from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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said,
education
is the
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eye of
human
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. It is
improtant
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important
that every person
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education
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at
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free of cost whether it is primary, secondary or tertiary. I totally agree with
this
notion and I will discuss all supporting details in
this
eassy
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easy
. First and foremost, free
education
leads to diminished the difference between the lower and the upper class. Children have
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potential to get higher jobs,
however
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they
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not have
proper
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resources to continue their studies after
the
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high school.
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,
rich
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a rich
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kid becomes a doctor with the help of their
family
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money without any difficulties
while
becoming a doctor is
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goal for
poor
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the poor
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kid because of
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the
money hindrance as the doctorate degree is too expensive to achieve for
middle
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class.
Moreover
,
free of cost
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studies
helps
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the
country
grow 4 times faster since no one is illiterate. More and more
people
are educated means development is on
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level.
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best illustration of
this
, the United
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of America is well
developed
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country
because
people
are educated to push their
country
's economy. They have
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to think on
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higher level and
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new things and ways to contribute
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the
country
's
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. On top of that, discrimination between castes will take
back
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seat with
this
initiative. Children below the poverty line can study in one classroom on
same
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benches with high standards
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pupils
. Private and government schools could not make
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between
people
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ability to study
according to
money standards. There would be only
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one kind of educational
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,
who
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will have
purpose
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to educate
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individuals. In conclusion, it is apparent from
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discussion that
education
should be free for
people
as
this
step
demolish
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discrimination and
give
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chance to individuals to study without knowing the lower and
upoer
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upper
class.
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,
this
is
best
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way to make educated
country
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countries
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of the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • socioeconomic status
  • social mobility
  • leveling the playing field
  • long-term economic benefits
  • workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • practical challenges
  • financial burden
  • quality decline
  • taxpayers' money
  • tertiary education
  • accessibility
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