The diagram below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.ะน

The diagram below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.ะน
The bar chart indicates
about
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apply
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changes in
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the catergories
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catergories
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categories
of transport in Europe by
traveller
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travellers
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between 1950 and 1990.
Overall
, it is clear to see that number of peoples who chosen
travel
by
foot
is dropped when compear with a year before.
However
,
average
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the average
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of travellers who
chose
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choose
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car
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a car
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is
significant
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significantly
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rise in
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rising
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every
years
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year
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.
While
, rates of increase and decrease are so similar.
To begin
with, in
a
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the
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year
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apply
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of
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apply
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1950
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the foot
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foot
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the foot
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is
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was
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the most
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most
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the most
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poppular choise
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popular choice
of travellers about 40% of visitors. On the
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contrary
contary
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contary,
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just only 5% of
tourist
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tourists
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chose
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to travels
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travels
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travel
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by
car
. But in 1970
travel
by
car
is more famous with the approxiemately 25% of the tourist standard and the rate of European tourists choosing to
travel
by
foot
has fall slightly. The
larges
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largest
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chance is in
1990
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the 1990
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year,
travel
by
car
is
in
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more in
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demand than
other
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any other
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choice
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choices
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with around 41% of visitors
choose
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choosing
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it
on
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, on
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the other hand,
scale
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the scale
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of
peoples
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people
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who selected
travel
by
foot
is only 6%.
Although
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However
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, in 1950 several of tourists
who
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apply
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picked
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to travels
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travels
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travel
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by bike is more than
bus
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by bus
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is close to 30% and
average
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an average
the average
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of
peoples
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people
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who
choose
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chose
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bus
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the bus
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only 18%. In 1970 with many raesons of travelers 26% of them pick
bus
to travels so that's more than other.
Moreover
, figure of 1990,
bus
it was chosen second in number when compared to
car
approxiemately 16%
while
number of bike is lower than other with 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, foot, car, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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