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The diagram below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.ะน

The diagram below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.ะน
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The bar chart indicates
about
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apply
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changes in
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the catergories
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catergories
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categories
 of transport in Europe by
traveller
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travellers
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 between 1950 and 1990.
Overall
, it is clear to see that number of peoples who chosen
travel
 by
foot
 is dropped when compear with a year before.
However
,
average
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the average
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 of travellers who
chose
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choose
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car
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a car
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 is
significant
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significantly
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rise in
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rising
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 every
years
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year
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.
While
, rates of increase and decrease are so similar.
To begin
 with, in
a
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the
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 year
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apply
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of
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apply
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1950
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the foot
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foot
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the foot
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is
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was
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the most
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most
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the most
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poppular choise
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popular choice
 of travellers about 40% of visitors. On the
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contrary
contary
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contary,
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 just only 5% of
tourist
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tourists
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 chose
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to travels
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travels
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travel
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 by
car
. But in 1970
travel
 by
car
 is more famous with the approxiemately 25% of the tourist standard and the rate of European tourists choosing to
travel
 by
foot
 has fall slightly. The
larges
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largest
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 chance is in
1990
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the 1990
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 year,
travel
 by
car
 is
in
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more in
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 demand than
other
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any other
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choice
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choices
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 with around 41% of visitors
choose
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choosing
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 it
on
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, on
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 the other hand,
scale
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the scale
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 of
peoples
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people
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 who selected
travel
 by
foot
 is only 6%.
Although
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However
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, in 1950 several of tourists
who
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apply
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picked
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to travels
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travels
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travel
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 by bike is more than
bus
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by bus
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 is close to 30% and
average
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an average
the average
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 of
peoples
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people
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 who
choose
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chose
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bus
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the bus
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 only 18%. In 1970 with many raesons of travelers 26% of them pick
bus
 to travels so that's more than other.
Moreover
, figure of 1990,
bus
 it was chosen second in number when compared to
car
 approxiemately 16%
while
 number of bike is lower than other with 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, foot, car, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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