Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: • Say why you would like to go on the trip • Suggest what you could do to help during the trip • Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to let you know that I would like to accompany my daughter and her friends on their trip to Paris.
To commence with, I am Liana’s mother and I have heard from my daughter that you are looking for some parents who want to assist you during
this
journey. Since I have a valid Schengen visa, I decided to come with her. As you know, I am a physician and I am working in a French pharmaceutical company as a medical advisor. Therefore
, I not only can manage emergency health conditions, but also
I can be a good travel guide because I have travelled to Paris a couple of times already. Moreover
, since our headquarters is located in Paris, my colleagues can help us in case of unforeseen issues. It would be highly appreciated if you let me know your idea in this
regard. Moreover
, please inform me , how much I should pay for the trip and which hotel we will stay.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely
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structure
In the closing line, "Yours sincerely" should be followed by a comma.
grammar
In the query about payment and hotel stay, the phrase "please inform me , how much I should pay..." should remove the comma after 'me'.
structure
You provided a clear and logical structure in your letter, organizing your reasons, suggestions, and questions effectively.
suitable writing tone
The formal tone of the letter is well-suited for addressing a head teacher, demonstrating your understanding of the appropriate writing style.
complete response
You addressed all parts of the task, including your reasons for wanting to go, how you can help, and questions about the trip.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite